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For my oral presentation I will be recording with __Sound Recorder__ on my PC. Below is a test of __Sound Recorder__ media type="file" key="Untitled.wma" width="300" height="300"

Here is my commentary of E.B. White's essay //The Sea and the Wind that Blows//. media type="file" key="commentary.wma" width="300" height="300" Please go in depth for the sake of your peers. Make sure to make specific comments, not general, ambiguous ones. Please write your responses in clear, full sentences. Think critically about what you just heard, and reply appropriately.

You are required to address: -Did the speaker address context? Purpose? The speaker addresses the purpose of the passage by providing the setting of the passage, and putting that in context with the overall setting of the passage. -Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? The speaker used a chronological organization based on Mrs Gianopoulos' list of questions. -What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR? How did Whites word choice contribute to creating the pivotal theme of uncertainty? Can you give an example that supports this? -What did the speaker do well? The speaker did a good job of analyzing the tone of the passage by comparing it to the earlier tone of the essay. -What would you suggest for improvement? I would suggest that the speaker take the time to give examples of literary devices and expand upon how the further the passage. -What did the speaker forget to address? (lit terms, themes, etc.)  The speaker forgot to address literary terms such as phonetic devices (assonance, consonance, etc) or metaphors. -What would you score them based on the IB Rubric? knowledge and understanding 5 interpretation 9 presentation 8 use of language 4

26/30Michael Dickey --

You are required to address: -Did the speaker address context? Purpose? Yes because the speaker went over the story and what happened in the beginning.

-Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? The speaker used the questions assigned to us by Mrs. Gianopoulos' questions in a chornilogical order.

-What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR? Why would the speaker get tired of reading at the end of the story due to Whites sudden lack of vocabulary? -What did the speaker do well? The speaker adressed what they were going to do from the start and explains what happens within the story. The speaker also did well with imbedding the quotes within their commentary.

-What would you suggest for improvement? I think that the speaker should go more in depth with the description she has of certain devices (i.e tone, description ect.) and how it furthers the story.

-What did the speaker forget to address? (lit terms, themes, etc.) The speaker missed a few literary devices such as methaphors similies more description.

-What would you score them based on the IB Rubric?

25/30 Adam Taylor A=5 B=10 C=7 D=3

My oral commentary on Hamlet media type="file" key="hamlet commentary.wma" width="300" height="45"

Below is my oral commentary on Much Ado About Nothing media type="file" key="much ado commentary.wma" width="300" height="45"

Kyra's review of Sari's second Shakspeare commentary: -Did the speaker address context? Purpose? Yes. She summarizes the play very well and also takes the time to summarize what is hapeneing in the passage that she in commenting on. This was very easy to follow :) -Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? Yes there is. She followed her organizational principle through the whole commentary. -What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR? How do the contradicting tones of Benedick and Beatrice progress through the passage and how do they effect it? -What did the speaker do well? Sari did a very good job at giving examples of what she was talking about and relating it to the text and how it effects it. She also summarized the play in the beginning very nicely. Not too much and not too little. I also noticed that she was very confident in her speaking and there were no "umms" or anything along those lines. -What would you suggest for improvement? Even though I said Sari was confident in her speaking I did notice that it sounded like she was reading from a text. -What did the speaker forget to address? (lit terms, themes, etc.) I don't believe Sari forgot to mention anything.

Score: 19/30

Sari's comments -Did the speaker address context? Purpose? I explained what was happening in the passage -Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? I used a chronological order based off the passage What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR? I don't have any questions. -What did the speaker do well? I did well in explaining my observations and going into details. I used plenty of textual evidence -What would you suggest for improvement? Try not to stutter. And ask Mrs. G for advice on what to explain first and what to explain last. -What did the speaker forget to address? (lit terms, themes, etc.) Noting.

Knowledge and Understanding of Work: 3 Interpretation and Personal Response: 6 Presentation: 7 Use of Language: 3

Score: 17/30