Student+Dearing,+Justin

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Determine what the audio recording feature is on your own computer, and respond to this invitation to join the class wiki by writing down what the application or software is called that you will be using to create an audio file of your commentaries. If you do not have such capability on your personal or home computer, please see me to arrange to use a school computer for creating audio recordings of your commentaries.

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Hello Mrs. G. I am glad to FINALLY be on here!!! The recording software I will be using is called Voice Recorder (unique, i know). It is an application on my phone.

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This is Connor's review of Justin's work: -Did the speaker address context? Purpose? Justin addressed both context and purpose of this essay, and did a very good job of both. (There was a lot of context presented, and the purpose could be seen throughout). -Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? Justin did use and explain an organizational principle for his commentary, though it wasn't as organizational as it maybe could have been. -What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR? How did White feel about the league after he learned about the treatment of animals requirement of the league? -What did the speaker do well? Justin very well laid out and talked about all the questions asked by Mrs. G. In addition, his voice was clear and he went into good detail about the things he talked about. -What would you suggest for improvement? Justin repeated a number of things, throughout his commentary. I would try not to repeat what he is saying. -What did the speaker forget to address? (lit terms, themes, etc.) Justin talked about literary terms, but really only irony. I would talk about more, if I could find any. In addition, I think a larger conclusion would be good. -What would you score them based on the IB Rubric? 4 (Good, overall) 7 (Got brought down a bit for only talking about 1 literary term) 7 (Good supporting responses, but the organization is such that you bounced around a lot, which made it confusing). 3-4 (Hard to say, I'm not so good at this. But I say you did good, you just could have used MORE good grammar, and you had some troubles locating quotes you wanted to use occasionally. In general, however, I'd say you did quite well). Total: 21-22

Kyra's review: -Did the speaker address context? Purpose? Justin did address context and purpose. He gave good examples that supported his topic. He also constantly supported his theme and always related what he was talking about back to his main choice of theme. -Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? Yes there was and he followed through with it. I like how he decided to go by literary devices rather than go through it chronologically. -What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR? How does the change from a sarcastic tone to a r eminiscing tone effect the passage? -What did the speaker do well? Justin explained the tone very well and shows several relevant examples to support it. He also did a great job of relating everything back to his original theme of the kindness to animals. He was also very confident in his speaking which shows that he has a good grasp on the essay and that he understands it. -What would you suggest for improvement? I think that he could have found more literary devices. -What did the speaker forget to address? (lit terms, themes, etc.) I do not recall him mentioning the structure of the passage and how it assisted in conveying the writer's ideas. He never mention where the quotes were located. -What would you score them based on the IB Rubric?

Knowledge and understanding: 4 Interpretation and personal response: 7-8 Presentation: 7-8 Use of language: 4

Overall score: 21



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-Did the speaker address context? Purpose? Yes I gave a summary of the play and pinpointed the location of the passage in the play. -Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? Essentially there was. I tried to follow the STOP BAD FIT acronym, but I did not address how I was going to organize my thoughts during the commentary. -What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR? What are some overarching ideas or themes that are consistent throughout the play and also portrayed in this passage? -What did the speaker do well? I addressed many of the important literary devices in this passage such as tone, mood, and theme. -What would you suggest for improvement? I need to have everything ready and organized before I begin because when the time came to read a quote I couldn’t find it and it was just a 30 second pause. I need to not repeat myself so much! I need to incorporate more quotes. -What did the speaker forget to address? (lit terms, themes, etc.) I didn’t address symbol, diction, figurative language or really any overarching ideas. -What would you score them based on the IB Rubric? <span style="color: maroon; font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">A:3 <span style="color: maroon; font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">B:6 <span style="color: maroon; font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">C:8 <span style="color: maroon; font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">D:2 <span style="color: maroon; font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">Total: 19