Student+Dickey,+Michael

Welcome to your wiki page!

Determine what the audio recording feature is on your own computer, and respond to this invitation to join the class wiki by writing down what the application or software is called that you will be using to create an audio file of your commentaries. If you do not have such capability on your personal or home computer, please see me to arrange to use a school computer for creating audio recordings of your commentaries.

You will upload these audio files to your personal wiki page, and then you will review the oral commentaries of peers and offer feedback via the discussion feature.

Instructions on uploading files are forthcoming.

I will use the default program Sound Recorder to record my IOC.

‍‍‍‍here is my commentary

media type="file" key="American boy commentary.wma" width="300" height="300"

Did the speaker address context? Purpose? The speaker sometimes would address the purpose of whites actions through the commentary but did not address the context ad tell us the story of what's happening in the excerpt.

-Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? Yes there was an orginizational principal in the commentary. It was saying how he was going to address certain things before others to get his point of the theme across.

What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR? What do all of the literary devices you mentioned such as Metaphor, Hyperbole, and Situational iroy do for the story and your theme as a whole?

What did the speaker do well? The speaker did extremely well with listing all of the literary devices within the story. The speaker also did well with having some quotes to back up what he wanted to get across in his commentary

What would you suggest for improvement? Everytime that you introduce a new literary device to your commentarymake sure you have evidence to back it up and make sure you tell what it does to the story as a whole.

What did the speaker forget to address? (lit terms, themes, etc.) The speaker forgot to address what happened in the story before he started off with his commentary.

What would you score them based on the IB Rubric? A=5 B=9 C=7 D=5 26/30 Adam Taylor

‍‍‍‍Here is my IOC on Shakespear's Much Ado About Nothing:

media type="file" key="secret love IOC.wma" width="300" height="45"

Hamlet IOC media type="file" key="data-2012-2-5-17-42-28.3gp" width="300" height="300"

Yes, you said the passage was broken up into 3 different passages according to what Hamlet is pondering, you said you would address them in chronological order and you did.
 * -Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? **

**What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR?**

You said that Shakespeare ends the Soliloquy with a rhyming couplet, but you did not explain what effect this has on the reader or viewer of the play? Can you please explain?

**What did the speaker do well?**

I did not here an umm… or an uhh…. once great job! You also gave a lot of text evidence to strengthen your arguments, which I thought was very helpful.

**What would you suggest for improvement?**

Maybe talking a little bit faster, because at some points I would lose track of what exactly you were talking about.

**What did the speaker forget to address? (lit terms, themes, etc.)**

- Smooth transitions allow for following the thought process of Hamlet - Soliloquy ends with rhyming couplet -Simile “graves like beds” (good job explaining what this does for the reader)
 * You addressed: **

- Themes, which I think there could have been an overarching theme in the passage
 * <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 13px;">You didn’t address: **

<span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 13px;">What would you score based on the IB Rubric?

<span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 13px;">A=4 <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 13px;">B=7 <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 13px;">C=8 <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 13px;">D=5 <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 13px;">24/30

<span style="color: black; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; font-size: 13px;">Jessica Candelaria

Commentary review

by Michael Dickey

-Did the speaker address context? Purpose?

not really.

-Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary?

Yes I addressed the passage in chronological order based on the theme of hamlets musings

-What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR?

did the rhyming couplet actually do any thing in the passage? if so what does it do?

-What did the speaker do well?

the speaker used had good incorporation of textual evidence.

-What would you suggest for improvement?

the speaker had long pauses. the speaker should plan ahead better and practice to reduce the length of the pauses.

-What did the speaker forget to address? (lit terms, themes, etc.)

the subject of the passage, and the theme

-What would you score them based on the IB Rubric?

Criterion A: 3

Criterion B: 7

Criterion C: 7

Criterion D: 4

23/30