Student+Gonzales,+Franco

Hi, Ms. G & classmates. For my oral presentation I will be recording with __Sound Recorder__ for Windows Vista. media type="file" key="sea and wind commentary.wma" width="150" height="150"

-Did the speaker address context? Purpose? (//The speaker did adress the context of the situation. He clearly explained how this essay fit into the life of Mr. E.B. White//.) -Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? //(Towards the beginning of the commentary, there was the mentioning of a proposed structure to which the speaker would present. The speaker mentioned that they would take disect the passage in a chronological manner.)// -What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR? //(If I were the accessor, I would ask the speaker questions along the lines of : "In your mind, were the literary devices hidden within the poem the primary components which gave you the idea to compare the structure to a wave? If so, did you come to this realization after your first read through?" & "Based off the provided passage, could Mr. E.B. White's "addiction" to the sea be considered normal or humanly?)// -What did the speaker do well? // (The speaker utilized quotations phenomenally. Almost every major claim which was made over the course of the commentary, was supported by some type of textual evidence. The "in-depth" manner which the speaker investigated a given topic was greatly appreciated as well.) //  -What would you suggest for improvement?   //(The structure in which the commentary is currently set up could be altered a bit the next time one of these "I.O.C." presentations is done. This could be done so that every section would be composed of something different such as a sound device section, a mechanical devices section, a tonal section, a structural section....etc.)// -What did the speaker forget to address? (lit terms, themes, etc.)  (//For the most part, the speaker touched upon some literary terms, themes, etc. An example of this would be "metaphor".They could, however, use more literary devices throughout their commentary. More literary devices would only lead to a stronger I.O.C.)// -What would you score them based on the IB Rubric? // (Based on the I.B. rubric, I would bestow a 25/30 upon the speaker.) //  // A.Knowledge and Understanding of Extract or Work(s): 5 //// B.Interpretation and Personal Response: 7 //// C. Presentation: 8 //// D. Use of Language: 5 //  // Note: It was quite enjoyable to evaluate and listen to this commentary. // Graded and commented upon by Eric A. Valdez

Aaron's review of Kiko's IOC: -Did the speaker address context? Purpose? He went into great detail about how this passage attained to EB White himself. -Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary? Yes, and I like how you addressed the order you were going to go in at the beginning of the commentary. -What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR? What would you say is the overall tone in this passage? What is some evidence that you have to support your answer? -What did the speaker do well? Your IOC was organized and it followed the guidelines you set at the beginning. I also like how you backed up all your points with evidence. -What would you suggest for improvement? I would suggest going into a little bit more detail about theme and tone. Those were to the two main things that you touched on but didn't really explain in depth. -What did the speaker forget to address? (lit terms, themes, etc.) Again I would suggest tone and theme focus. You did have the literary device of personification, and while this was good perhaps you could find some others that also help back up your claims about the kind of man White was. -What would you score them based on the IB Rubric? A.5B.7C.6D.5Overall I would give a 23/30 for this IOC

Hello, this time I am going to use Sound Recorder for __Windows 7__, in hopes that it will be recognizable by a wider range or computers. media type="file" key="much ado commentary.wma" width="300" height="45" Here is my commentary on "Death, the Great Equalizer". media type="file" key="Death, the Equalizer Commentary.wma"